Essay Draft-Chapter Three & Political Ads

Danelle Stone
Professor Bleck
English 101
18 July 2008

The time for the 2008 Presidential Election is rapidly approaching and the two candidates left standing are Barack Obama and John McCain. While voters weigh their decision between the two candidates, campaign ads are constantly flying at them from every possible direction. In chapter three of their book Un-Spun: finding facts in a world of disinformation, Brooks Jackson and Kathleen Hall Jamieson provide the reader with eight tricks used to deceive people in commercial and political advertising. The public can use Jackson and Jamieson’s list of deceptive tricks to help them recognize and reevaluate the political claims present in these ads. John McCain’s campaign ad “It’s Time For Action”, located on his website, applies the commonly used deceptive trick known as “eye candy” (51). While using images of himself interacting with people who live in disadvantaged neighborhoods, McCain is enforcing the idea that he is the only candidate capable of participating in the action necessary to improve the lives of the under-privileged. However, the “eye candy” trick is not the only tool of deception that John McCain uses, and further examination using Esther Thorson’s Savvy Voter criteria will reveal several other persuasive features that are present in this political ad.

In his ad “It’s Time For Action”, John McCain is portrayed as a “man of the people, father, savior, and a friend” (Thorson). All of these personas are what Thorson refers to as candidate mythologies which can stir up numerous emotions in the viewer. He’s shown shaking hands with working men and women of different races which depicts him as both a man of the people and a friend. Therefore, the ad shows McCain as an advocate for all people from any racial and/or ethnic background, and he is relatable on a variety of levels. He is portrayed as a father figure and role model for the younger generation by interacting with the children in his ad, and he is shown as a savior when he states that “the time for false promises is over, it’s time for action.” This statement implies that John McCain will save the public from the harmfulness of false promises that have been made by his opponent, without mentioning what those false promises are.

John McCain’s ad also includes specific props, music, and camera angles that are all used to produce emotion in the viewer. The American flag is used in this ad as a prop to induce feelings of patriotism and pride, and John McCain is pictured speaking from a podium which Thorson states, “emphasizes power and good ideas.” The American flag might also be used to represent McCain’s values which consist of a love for his country. McCain’s bus, which is conveniently named the “Straight Talk Express”, is another prop that is used to enforce the idea that he will save the public from the politicians who provide false promises because he is a self-proclaimed straight-shooter. Throughout this ad, McCain talks about the disadvantages that plague certain areas of the United States and how equal opportunity should be available for everyone. This theme is reinforced through the music playing in the background where the line, “Lord remember me”, is repeated multiple times. At the end of his campaign ad, the cameraman strategically zoomed in on McCain’s face when he restated “it’s time for action” because, as Thorson explains in The Savvy Voter, the zoom view has the capability to produce a sense of importance and emotion among the viewers. Therefore, whenever voters hear that phrase, they might attach to it a sense of meaning even though they are unaware of what the word “action” really implies and/or consists of.

Ultimately John McCain’s ad maintains the positive feelings of patriotism and unity and it appeals to the working middle/lower class. McCain reached out to the working class in this ad because he wants to portray himself as relatable to all people of different racial, ethnic, and financial backgrounds. McCain’s ad uses the “eye candy” affect to show the viewers that he cares about the working man. McCain is shown talking to men and women, shaking the hands of ordinary people, and interacting with children which all portray him as a “man of the people” (Thorson). He speaks of the areas in the United States that are failing to enjoy the prosperity that America has to offer and about the constant struggle that face many disadvantaged families who are trying to provide their children with the same opportunities that other American children possess. The name of his ad “It’s Time For Change” signifies that McCain will do everything in his power to provide equal opportunity for everyone but the word “action” is extremely vague. What action is McCain planning to take to improve the lives of those who are under-privileged? The word “action” can pack a huge meaning, so we as voters need to constantly ask questions and conduct research in order to avoid accepting the implied message in this ad.

The public is constantly being bombarded with campaign ads during presidential elections which is why voters need to arm themselves with the necessary tools provided by Jackson and Jamieson which will help the public recognize deception. John McCain’s ad used the deceptive trick referred to by Jackson and Jamieson as “eye candy” which reinforced his idea that he is a man capable of relating to many people and their struggles. Through his ad, McCain implied that he was the only candidate capable of undertaking the action necessary to improving the lives of the less fortunate. The “eye candy” and persuasive tactics discovered using Esther Thorson’s Savvy Voter criteria allow the viewer to dissect the ad’s claims and deceptive tricks. Political campaign ads are designed to influence the viewer’s decision on who they believe is the best candidate for the presidency. Therefore, it is extremely important for citizens to recognize the persuasive tools used to influence them. Politicians in both parties will say anything to receive a vote, and it is the public’s job to understand deceptive tactics and how they are used. These precautions will provide the public with the much needed insight into the true meaning of political campaign ads which will prompt one to make an educated and informed decision based on pure fact.

I think that for the most

I think that for the most part this was a great essay. The only thing I struggled with was in the first paragraph and with your thesis. I had to read the first paragraph a few times to get a better idea of how the paragraph was going to follow. Good job though.

This is a very well thought

This is a very well thought out and written paper. You really grab hold of the reader and make them want to read farther. I only have a few suggestions: Your thesis was a little vague, for lack of a better word, so maybe if you more directly say where you’re headed the reader will follow where their going better. To strengthen your point you could develop the fourth paragraph a little more, and explain the examples a little more. I really enjoyed your word choice and how well you made the paragraphs flow together. Really great job!

to danelle

Danelle,

The introduction works in all but providing a clear thesis, a clear claim about the video, a point that will be developed throughout the essay. Make it clear to your reader why you think it is of interest or importance that we can better read the video using the savvy voter criteria. Maybe the essay's last sentence will work. With something along those lines, each of the paragraphs can then be explained in a way that makes clear how each element, how understanding the examined elements, can help a voter make a more informed decision.

The body paragraphs work pretty well, the first in particular. however, if the examples are more specific and developed, it will work better. Don't tell your reader that he is shaking hands with working men and women of different races, describe the black man with the dirty work shirt and hard hat and the Hispanic woman wearing an apron or whatever the heck they look like. This will connect better with your reader. This is the evidence that shows your evaluation and analysis is accurate. There is also some need for an explanation tying it back to the thesis, but first the thesis. The second paragraph needs the same sort of development, but it should be split, one paragraph each for for props, music and camera angles. Jamming them all into a single paragraph doesn't do any of them justice.

My politics might show with this comment, but McCain is clearly trying to fool us with his man of the people mythology or persona. He is one of the wealthiest of all the senators, which is basically a millionaires club in its own right. While Obama is far from poor, he can't even come close to the money McCain and his wife have. Where this is relevant to the essay is that eye candy is meant to detract from the truth. In the book, we are told that the reporter spoke "bad" words while showing flattering pictures. McCain isn't going to do this in a campaign video, but conceptually, the pretty pictures of the video are meant to distract from the reality, so eye candy works.

Bradley

I can't find a negative thing to say

I think you have done an excellent job in every aspect.

Introduction
First sentence would be stronger as "The 2008 Presidential Election...". "time for the..." weakened the point. A beautiful introduction. I follow. I am interested in reading on to see what you are talking about.

Essay Focus, Thesis or Main point
"While using images of himself interacting with people who live in disadvantaged neighborhoods, McCain is enforcing the idea that he is the only candidate capable of participating in the action necessary to improve the lives of the under-privileged." I feel it throughout. Along with voter savvy criteria.

Conclusion
Nicely wrapped up: "it is extremely important for citizens to recognize the persuasive tools used to influence them."

Wording and Sentence Structure
Easy to read and comprehend. I appreciate your writing style.

Conventions of Standard American English
Clear and concise. Paper seems well thought out.

Adequacy of response to assignment
Dead on. You hit so many of Thorson's points. (Do we need to explain who Esther Thorson is?)

Appropriateness of topic treatment for college reading audience
This seems appropriate.

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posted twice!

Introduction: very strong

Introduction:

very strong intro , using the savvy article and un-spun correctly

Essay Focus, Thesis or Main point:

really strong and makes the reader want to go on.

Conclusion:

Conclusion ties in with intro and tells the reader why they should care.

Adequacy of response to assignment:

Your essay is the one I like best so far, it actually follows the assignment guidelines. Political ad was used, un-spun used, and savvy article. Well done.

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