The Introduction is a 1. There is an identifiable issue, but it lacks any kind of thesis as well as no passage in the book to link to a video, which also appear to be missing. The intro does present an issue and gives some general background information, but is missing key elements like a thesis, video, and a passage citied from the text.

The focus of the essay does not centered on a video because no video was mentioned. As a result the score is 0. The focus of the essay is more of an extension of the introduction than a statement of points. The body should be explaining the different elements used in a video related to your issue. these elements would also be stated in the thesis.

The conclusion is closer to a 2 than anything else. It does wrap up what was said and begins to make a solid point, but really needs to have that point driven home strongly.

Overall the essay can be improved tremendously by inserting a thesis, video relating to issue, and revovlving the paper around the video's elements will make the essay much more coherent and staright fowrard. Overal all rating is a 1.