OK read this paper, though not done it is more concise. Ellie's paper

Ellie Fairbanks
Mr. Bleck
Literature
Young Goodman Brown
Nathaniel Hathorne was born during 1804 in the city of Salem Massachusetts. His name changed later to Hawthorne so as to disassociate himself from his great great grandfather who was a judge at the Salem Witch Trials. (Cite) The shame that Hawthorne felt because a relative had participated in these trails as well as partook in the Puritanical beliefs of the day, might have been what led him to write the now famous, Young Goodman Brown. With this short story, many aspects of it are left open ended and up for interpretation, the narrator amongst them. Knowing what kind of narrator is speaking will help readers to conclude the reliability or unreliability of the story. Knowing the reliability will help readers know what has been gained or lost as mere readers. Nathanial Hawthorne uses the narration in Young Goodman Brown to voice his opinions about Puritanical beliefs.
Knowing what point of view the narrator is speaking from is important to knowing the truth and dependability behind the words. Young Goodman Brown is written in third person limited omniscience where the narrator knows the thoughts and feelings of one or some characters but not all. From using this kind of narration, Hawthorne “does not intend for you to question the narrator’s perspective. The author expects you to regard the narrators information, even the narrators’ value judgments, as objective, undistorted truth”(book). From this definition readers may assume that the narrator is therefore a reliable one. Hawthorne uses this technique because readers cannot then dispute the narrator, and must therefore listen to the underlying message about Puritanism.
A reliable narrator is also referred to as a credible or sympathetic narrator. “The personal involvement of a reliable narrator does not typically impede a truthful account of the story, and so determining reliability should be based in part on the narrator's ability to distance him or herself from his or her personal relations with other characters to provide a more impartial account”(Rimmon-Kenan). When Goodman Brown dies the narrator does a good job distancing himself from Brown by saying, “they (the people of his town) carved no hopeful verse upon his tombstone, for his dying hour was gloom”(141). This suggests no intimate connection between the narrator and the dead Brown because there is no sorrowful language mourning his death. By distancing the narrator from Brown we as readers, do not pick up on any partiality towards him, and therefore read the narrator as a knowing source who can only tell us Brown’s point of view. The narrator can be thought of Hawthorne manifesting his disrespect towards Puritanism through a scenario with a man and the devil.
The narrator seems to suggest that the puritans at the meeting in the forest, are disillusioned people who act holy in the day, worship Satan by night, and then act holy the next day. The narration brings up the idea that the puritan’s way of life is a restraint to human nature, which includes the balance of good and evil. Because the narration is reliable readers accept the idea that Hawthorne presents as a valid one.
The concept of reliable narration in the story of Young Goodman Brown is one that is important to the overall interpretation of the short story. Hawthorne wrote the story with a reliable narrator so that people can draw away a broader more generalized statement about societies gravitation to a balance of good and evil forces, as well as debunk the idea of stifling Puritanical beliefs . Without questioning what is true and false readers are allowed to simply read and let the story soak in and reread for further self enlightenment. With any story the narrator is the most important part and readers must constantly question the reliability that it presents. By deciding to write Young Goodman Brown in the context of a reliable narrator we receive all the benefits of Hawthorne’s views, without having to question the source.

Kersti's response to Ellie

This is better! It's progressing in a good direction!! Your paper is unfolding nicely!! Please edit mine!! You are a strong writer and I need help!

But you're doing good, just keep it coming!!

Kersti

Response to Ellie's paper

Cate Graman
6/3/09
English 111- Ellie’s paper edit
Bleck

INTRODUCTION
The introduction was really good. I liked how it opened up with telling us a little about the author. This helps us later in the essay when we try to understand why he wrote this story and what he means by it. It was also just very interesting and it caught my attention which is what the introduction of a paper is supposed to do. I think it caught my attention because you were talking about a real person’s life, not just a made up story. You related Hawthorne’s story to an aspect of his life.

ESSAY FOCUS, THESIS OR MAIN POINT
I thought this essay was pretty focused. I though the 4th paragraph (the shortest one) had some really great ideas and just need to be elaborated on and it needed some quotes. I think the thesis is the last sentence in the introduction paragraph, that: Hawthorne uses the narration in his story to explain his opinions about Puritanical beliefs. This main point was explained well throughout the paper. Lots of things could have been elaborated on.

DEVELOPMENT OF IDEAS AND/OR EXPERIENCES
I think you needed some more quotes from other sources. The quotes you have are very good. The paper was well developed and just needs a little work.

ORGANIZATION, STRUCTURE AND/OR PARAGRAPHING
“With this short story, many aspects of it are left open ended and up for interpretation, the narrator amongst them.” I thought this sentence in your paper didn’t sound very good. It wasn’t easy to read, it didn’t really flow. The paragraphs were well developed all except for the fourth one. I really liked that paragraph though; it just needs more information and supporting facts.

WORDING, SENTENCE STRUCTURE AND CONVENTIONS OF STANDARD AMERICAN ENGLISH
The sentences make sense and are important to your essay. Spelling, punctuation, word order, and word choice are all appropriate. You need a Works Cited page.

ADEQUACY OF RESPONSE TO ASSIGNMENT
The paper is developed very well but I don’t think it is long enough. You have the start of some really good ideas; you just need to keep going with them a little bit. It followed the assignment.

APPROPRATENESS OF TOPIC TREATMENT FOR COLLEGE READING AUDIENCE
Yes. This paper is well written so far, it just needs a little more development. But I think it’s going to turn out well. Good luck on it!

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