Sonnet 1... Were we supposed to post these?
There's not a lot of these posted, so I'm not really sure if we're supposed to post or just read in class. Well, I will anyway.
How have you snuck into my mind again?
I had meant to guard jealously the key
But you threw off the shackles made of tin
designed to keep you friend only to me.
The frozen moat entrenched around my heart
Across you skated without breaking sweat.
You dodged my shots, I realized with a start
You'd breach my castle's stone walls even yet.
I fear each moment that you'll find your way
Into the center of my very keep.
The danger keeps me at my post all day;
At night I cannot even taste sweet sleep.
Alas, you've conquered me like none before.
I beg, admit you tried. I want no more.
So it's not-- Shakespeare, you know, but I had fun writing it!
Fantastic!
This was really great :) You sound to me as though you're really frustrated by the strong will of this other person, and you communicate it very clearly and in a delightfully pictured way.
frustration
I'm glad this came across in the sonnet. It was fun coming up with all the castley metaphors.
Erin Kay Schulz
Metaphors
I love a good metaphor and yours were fabulous! I always seem to have a problem of using too many, though. Great job reading today, by the way. I got the emotions clearly from reading the sonnet, but hearing it is something completely different, in a good way, of course. I mean, you just get so much more out of listening to it.
*Tina