Jason's sonnet
Submitted by Anonymous on Tue, 01/26/2010 - 05:52
There came a fierce storm to desend,
And all my days were dark as night.
It seemed as if it'd never end.
My world was such a dreary sight.
The storm raged on to torture me.
It snowed and snowed not white but grey.
This cold it would not let me be.
It seemed this storm was here to stay.
Then I awoke to see a star
To melt away my icy woes
And scatter all those clouds so far.
From where she came no one knows.
Because this star I came to kiss,
She fills my life with endless bliss.
This is beautiful...
Wow, was the first thought after I finished this. Your description is very good and the imagery was great. I could really feel what you were saying in the beginning of this poem. By the end of it, I was smiling. I really enjoyed this.
I Agree
This sonnet is so full of imagery, but very sweet and lovely about the person it's directed at. Comparing a person to a star was very nice and sentimental. I have to agree that by the end I was smiling too. Very well done.
Love Your Poem
Omigosh, I loved this poem! I'm pretty sure it's my new favorite. I love the imagery and emotions in this piece as well as the weather metaphors. Especially the "grey snow" part. It really helped me paint a mental picture. Bravo!
*Tina
Grey instead of Gray!
Yes! I love when people spell it "grey". Sorry for the totally random remark. Haha, I just wanted to tell you that that makes me very glad.
I love how you describe the woman as a star who brings such light and joy to you. Very very sweet. :)