Sam's Sonnet
I have never written a sonnet before, so this one was a little rough. But it did make me appreciate Shakespeare's ability to write sonnets. But anyway, here it is...
Sonnet 1
Farewell, this word is never easily found,
But as the sun will hide beneath sky’s sight,
Or as fall fades and winter reclaims its ground
I too must painfully let you go tonight.
O, how I long to stay here in your eyes
Where life is clear and full of color,
Where you outshine the stars in midnight sky,
For they are pale compared to you, my lover.
But when I let you go, the black and white
Of life returns and night loses its star.
My world grows cold and though you’re still in sight
I find myself wishing you weren’t so far.
But as spring brings life to earth’s frozen tears
So too my heart will be when again you’re near.


metaphor
I really liked how the "seasons" metaphor was weaved through the sonnet. It is done so well that you both sides of the comparison complement each other.
Ryan K Bishop
Well Done
I have to agree with Molly. The way the poem flows, the imagery, it's all so wonderful! I know exactly how you feel when you really don't want to let your lover go even for just one night. I really liked how you compared it to the seasons too. Great job!
*Tina
Beautiful
Wow. This is excellent. The final couplet is beautiful and absolutely true of how it is when your Love is near after an absence for any length of time. You're sure this is your first sonnet? I must say, you definitely overcame any roughness you encountered while composing this. Do you have much background in poetry?
Wow, thanks.
I am glad you liked it. This sonnet took longer than I would like to admit to complete. Besides this one, I don't think I have ever written anything poetic. Working well with words is something that I struggle with. But, maybe this class will help with that. But thank you for your compliments. It boosted my poetic self esteem considerably.